Untitled ShesLeavingHome: A house on a hill
A fortress for certain
A Lonely prisoner
Behind the drawn curtain
The bridges and motes
The fences and walls
Keep in, not out
The gates tight jowls
Inside princess
Loves lost on you
This prison state
You nurtured and grew
Now light is blinding
And dark holds no hope
The noose round your neck
Is of your own rope
Re:Untitled i_sing_alone: I like the last stanza. I'm a sucker for rhyming poems! Gold star for you!
Re:Untitled teacherwriterguy: I liked:
A house on a hill
A fortress for certain
Esp. just liked that phrasing in the second line - the sounds link up to form that kind of prison of words. the 'for' and the 'cer' the 't' in both words.
Somebody's been raiding my gold star bin...
twg
Re:Untitled i_sing_alone: Mm-hmm. Quit stalking my posts, and I'll quit stealing your gold stars ::)
Re:Untitled ShesLeavingHome: [quote author=TWG's FlamingButterfly link=board=17;threadid=11016;start=0#msg88594 date=1115317255">
I like the last stanza. I'm a sucker for rhyming poems! Gold star for you!
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I too am a sucker for rhyming poems. (Go Dr. Seuss!)
To twg & twgfb-
Thanks for the feedback. And hey, no need to fight over those gold stars...I'll take 'em from anyone who's given 'em. I'm also a sucker for a gold star. Thanks! ;D
