The service slowcrawl: She stood on ceremony
ringing the Maypole
ties binding outstretched hands.
Lovely ritual
circular
blossoms and birth
Sometimes a skip
often a crawl
hands and knees and lips
Diametrically lesser
with each willful step
stumbling on acts of god
March! Breathe,
gasp and embrace
The post stands. Still.
Re:The service teacherwriterguy: I really like two aspects of this one:
The first line is a standout for me because there's metaphorical depth there. There's the simple saying, "She stood on ceremony" which means it's own thing. But there's some layers there - ceremony was important to her before? but not now? she stood on top of ceremony and ruined it? And so on and so forth.
I also liked the stateliness of the lines and the breaks - kind of mimics in its sound the feel of going slowly around the maypole.
teacherwriterguy
(eek... did I just do a teacher geek out? forgive me)
